Wish to write gross sales emails like a professional?
Kristina and Will have a look at frequent electronic mail errors (utilizing actual examples) and rewrite them with the intention to be taught what to do in a different way.
Be a part of Kristina Finseth (Sr. Supervisor, Outbound Development Advertising at Greenhouse) and Will Allred (Co-Founder & COO at Lavender) to get TWO views and TWO approaches on actual gross sales emails, each week on Gross sales Hacker.
Will is flying solo at this time as a result of Kristina caught COVID-19 however is nicely sufficient (fortunately!) that she’s in a position to submit her rewrite. Lets have a look at this week’s electronic mail and get insights on why emails that don’t look good on cellular and that begins with a query mark don’t carry out nicely.
Watch the re-write, and take a look at the earlier than and after emails beneath! 👇
How’s this look on cellular?
Topic line: Kristina – name this week?
Hello Kristina,
Was performing some analysis and based mostly in your position because the Director of Development Advertising at Interseller , figured you’d be the very best individual to talk with about Tech Partnerships and Integrations. My firm is the primary Integration Market as a Service, so for context, we allow Enterprise to Enterprise SaaS firms to construct and enter in-app marketplaces.
Since tech partnerships are actually very important for progress, my firm allows Saas firms, akin to like firm and like firm, to rapidly lower the time to worth for his or her these partnerships and observe the mixing’s constructive affect on buyer retention and satisfaction.
When do you may have quarter-hour on Friday or Monday to speak about our service?
Finest,
Rep
Will’s Rewrite
Topic line: Integration Difficulty
Hello Kristina,
I do know Greenhouse has a whole lot of companions already, so I needed to ask…
Have you ever seen any offers stalled due to a lacking integration?
Development leaders sometimes vent. Integrations can restrict progress.
Purchasers desire a seamless expertise, so integrations grow to be a will need to have. Good luck making the case to engineering.
We make this simple in your workforce. One API will get you entry to a whole lot of firms.
Curious if that is frequent.
Will
Kristina’s Rewrite
Topic line: integration market
Kristina,
Seen Greenhouse has over 400 pre-built integrations listed on the positioning – spectacular!
Whereas it’s nice to have this seen for prospects, present prospects may very well be lacking out as their tech stacks evolve.
We’re serving to firms like like firm and like firm create constructive buyer experiences with our in-app market for integrations.
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